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Name: Lyndis

Home: Elibe/Sacae

Age: 19

Alignment: Lawful Good

Allies: The Caelin Army

Enemy's: Nergal, Darin, Lloyd, Linus, Ursula.

Motto: "I'll cut you down!"


Lyns Story


                                                                                   History on LI

After her grandfathers death. Lyn left Caelin to retire in the Sacaen plains, knowing her mission is done. Entrusting the kingdom to house Ostia, Lyn setted off for her new and final journey. With each village she passed she was greeted with Cheers and bows to the villagers for her heroic deeds from her last two adventures, sometimes she would be invited to large feasts to which she humbly joins. Her journey however took a serious turn for the worst when she found herself in front of a large and dark forest.

Deciding to venture into the forest in hopes of getting to the plains quicker, Lyn regretted her decision when she found herself lost. After hours of trying to find away out of the forest, Lyn gave up and decided to retire for the night, however she was soon met with heavy fog that engulfed the forest. Lyn tried to find a fog less place of the forest to sleep in, however she tripped and fell onto the ground!, knocking herself out.

When Lyn awoke, she felt her hand touch cold water, and the morning sky hitting her eyes. She got up and noticed the forests different appearance, now resembling more of a jungle. When she turned to look what was behind her, she saw an abandoned treehouse (Donkey Kongs.) Lyn decided to investigate the treehouse in hopes of finding away out of the weird Forest/Jungle. Unaware that she is far from her home of Sacae..She's now on the planet LI.



                                                                                                             
                                                                               Primary Attacks


Sol Katti: Using the Sol Katti, an ancient katana given to her by an old priest for saving him from bandits. She can deliver a powerful strike to the enemy, dealing damage to Him/Her.


Power Kick/Punch: Even without her Katti Lyn is a master of Self Defense. Delivering powerful Punches and kicks that would even make the strongest bandits run in fear.


Charge: Lyn will charge into the Enemy with her Sol Katti. Delivering the same amount of damage as a strike from it.



                                                                                 Special Attacks




Astra: Lyn will deliver 5 powerful consecutive attacks to the enemy, giving them powerful damage.

Vulnerary: Carrying with her three bottle's of vulnerary. Lyn can drink it to restore 10 of her Damage, or she can give it to another party member who might be in great peril.

Jump Stab: Lyn will jump high in the air and stab into the enemy's heads, Damaging them mass.


Astra Cooldown time: 5 Turns

Vulnerary: 3 Bottles each mission.

Cooldown time: 3 Turns

                                                              Final Smash -  Shadow Stab!

Lyn crouch's down and watches as the area around her turns dark and time slows down...As she targets her enemy's she waits until she gets a clear shot and when she dose she jumps towards them in light speed delivering powerful damage to them, so be aware Villains!

Discipline	Stat	Modifier
Strength	13	+1
Dexterity	7	-2
Perception	9	-1
Intelligence	12	+1
Charisma	13	+1
Constitution	16	+3

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First off, your stats. You numbered them wrong, and the modifiers are off. The basic formula is every 2 points in the stats makes 1 modifier point, and starting from 9 down, 2 points down equate to one less modifier point

Ex: 12= +1, 14= +2, 16= +3

Ex: 9= -1, 7= -2, 5= -3

Astra giving critical damage needs to be toned down as well. I understand Lyndis is essentially a sword master, and they are practically "Critical hit: the class", but perhaps coming up with a better alternative would allow the move to be used. Perhaps a cool down, or just letting that move have more modifiers in the skill would be better. Vulnerary and Jump stab, i see no problems with.

Shadow stab is also a very OP attack. I think i can let slide the guaranteed critical damage, considering the character and its class, but the 90-100% Insta-KO needs to be removed. Even if its just a "Large chance" any Insta-ko description is not going to be accepted.

Fix these, and we can see if Lyn can cut down the competition.

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Fix these, and we can see if Lyn can cut down the competition.

Oh i see what you did there.


There made new Edits:

- Fixed the Stats

- Removed any mention of how much Damage the Final smash can do

- And Added a cooldown time for Astra

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Annnd its changed!

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You still have 8 points to distribute in the stats department. Besides that, just the stats need a fixin'. It's gonna be real slice to get a FE rep.

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Done!

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Besides changing the strength modifier from a -1 to a +1, This app is complete. I can already tell lin is going to be the Cutting edge of characters ...You are now free to hate me for so many sword based puns.