Post by Sunnivale on Nov 7, 2021 13:47:32 GMT -8
Hello again everyone, it's been awhile since I last updated this thread, however I started a new draft for this story, which is now called Hunters! I recently wrote a short story related to this draft about what I intend the direction for it to be. I'm looking for some feedback about it, mainly about the story and whether it might be good as a series, so feel free to read when you can.
My main inspiration for the short story is Cave Story and Code Lyoko.
Warning: Graphic depictions of violence, mild swearing, as well as mentions of suicide and depictions of abuse, trauma and scary situations.
The Series
Plot: Following a tragic accident that resulted in the death of her uncle, Ortensia Clemens as well as the rest of her family move to the city of Cassilda following her father acquiring a position in the city's council. Ortensia, who hasn't had a good life back in her old town of Kelwae, doubts that things will change following this move.
However upon meeting Haruo Machida, a kaijin boy with the ability to turn into a scarlet lizard creature as well as his large family who are also kaijin, Ortensia is soon thrusted into a world where the supernatural is real and some of them have taken refuge in Cassilda to hide out from the world.
Quickly befriending Haruo and his family the Hoshino's, Ortensia goes to great lengths to make sure her new friends are not exposed to the world, but with discovering a new world comes with a dark side as they're some citizens in Cassilda that wish to cause harm to innocent citizens both supernatural or human. Something of which Ortensia, Haruo and the Hoshino's stand in the way of.
And if Ortensia wishes to protect the new people that she cares about, then she might have to use her violent side in order to protect innocent lives from being lost.
Even if some of those threats are humans themselves, which are those that are after Haruo and his family for their own personal gain.
Plot: The plot is similar to the one mentioned above, however along with Cassilda being a city filled with supernatural citizens hiding out from the world, there is a large space rock floating above Earth that's been floating above the planet for decades now. To the public, it's been called the Nameless Rock, but for Ortensia, Haruo and the Hoshino family, they call it the Twisted Core.
A mysterious force has been preventing people from trying to get close to the Core or even try and go inside it, however the group have found a teleporter that lets them not only go inside the Core itself, but at various locations. Like Cassilda, the Core is filled with Supernatural creatures and people, but unlike Cassilda, they're feral and dangerous and will kill anyone in their sights.
In this short story, four women in Cassilda have been found dead, and it looks as though a vampire might be behind it. To find proof, Ortensia and Haruo along with three members of the Hoshino family: Masumi Nakanishi, Arata Minami and Hisoka Ikeda plan a trip into one of the locations inside the Twisted Core, known as the Cave Labyrinth in order to find vampire venom that they can use to track down the girl's killer.
The venom however, is protected by a group of strigoi vampire, who hate uninvited guests that wish to take what's there's.
You can read the short story here: docs.google.com/document/d/1YJ8tTSSA8juNMnHHL8FcKMAe3VY-YZjpjNN4Td1xdOs/edit?usp=sharing
My main inspiration for the short story is Cave Story and Code Lyoko.
Warning: Graphic depictions of violence, mild swearing, as well as mentions of suicide and depictions of abuse, trauma and scary situations.
The Series
Plot: Following a tragic accident that resulted in the death of her uncle, Ortensia Clemens as well as the rest of her family move to the city of Cassilda following her father acquiring a position in the city's council. Ortensia, who hasn't had a good life back in her old town of Kelwae, doubts that things will change following this move.
However upon meeting Haruo Machida, a kaijin boy with the ability to turn into a scarlet lizard creature as well as his large family who are also kaijin, Ortensia is soon thrusted into a world where the supernatural is real and some of them have taken refuge in Cassilda to hide out from the world.
Quickly befriending Haruo and his family the Hoshino's, Ortensia goes to great lengths to make sure her new friends are not exposed to the world, but with discovering a new world comes with a dark side as they're some citizens in Cassilda that wish to cause harm to innocent citizens both supernatural or human. Something of which Ortensia, Haruo and the Hoshino's stand in the way of.
And if Ortensia wishes to protect the new people that she cares about, then she might have to use her violent side in order to protect innocent lives from being lost.
Even if some of those threats are humans themselves, which are those that are after Haruo and his family for their own personal gain.
The Short Story (The Strigoi's Precious Venom!)
Plot: The plot is similar to the one mentioned above, however along with Cassilda being a city filled with supernatural citizens hiding out from the world, there is a large space rock floating above Earth that's been floating above the planet for decades now. To the public, it's been called the Nameless Rock, but for Ortensia, Haruo and the Hoshino family, they call it the Twisted Core.
A mysterious force has been preventing people from trying to get close to the Core or even try and go inside it, however the group have found a teleporter that lets them not only go inside the Core itself, but at various locations. Like Cassilda, the Core is filled with Supernatural creatures and people, but unlike Cassilda, they're feral and dangerous and will kill anyone in their sights.
In this short story, four women in Cassilda have been found dead, and it looks as though a vampire might be behind it. To find proof, Ortensia and Haruo along with three members of the Hoshino family: Masumi Nakanishi, Arata Minami and Hisoka Ikeda plan a trip into one of the locations inside the Twisted Core, known as the Cave Labyrinth in order to find vampire venom that they can use to track down the girl's killer.
The venom however, is protected by a group of strigoi vampire, who hate uninvited guests that wish to take what's there's.
You can read the short story here: docs.google.com/document/d/1YJ8tTSSA8juNMnHHL8FcKMAe3VY-YZjpjNN4Td1xdOs/edit?usp=sharing
Last Edit:
Jun 6, 2022 4:11:00 GMT -8 by Sunnivale
